The Nightstar Zoo

Have you found a typo, a grammatical error, or some similar problem in the Schlock Mercenary archives?

This is the place to post your find.

It's not the place to DISCUSS your find. Just post it, post the reasons why you think that you've found a legitimate error, and let it go at that. I'll respond after researching the matter.

If you post other stuff in this forum, I will delete your post. This thread will stay on-track even if I have to lay that track through a mountain of corpses.

-Howard

URL: http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20060124.html
Where: first panel, first speech bubble.
Error: "five company's"
Should be: "five companies'"

Oooh. Good catch. Thank you. I'll fix that later this afternoon.

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20050414.html

Miscolouring on the tank in panels 1 and 4.

URL: http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20060102.html
Where: Second panel
Error (possibly): "Q-tittlation"
Should (maybe) be: "Q-tittilation"

Not sure whether this made up word should be spelt that way or not, but it felt... odd.

Okay, all the stuff listed above has been fixed, and the fixes have been posted.

Thank you!

http://schlockmercenary.com/d/20000629.html - "SFX: Brad out of breathe."; s/breathe/breath/ . For that matter, that line doesn't describe any visible feature of the strip, since Brad's dialogue in the next line includes his "(pant)" and "(gasp)".

http://schlockmercenary.com/d/20000701.html - the two lines that both drones speak together get credited to "Attorney Drone Colle"; should that read "Attorney Drone Collective"?

http://schlockmercenary.com/d/20010429.html - "tree--tops" in the fourth panel has two dashes, but should only have one. (For comparison, "tree-trunks" in the second panel has one dash.)

http://schlockmercenary.com/d/20010505.html - capitalization and punctuation issues in transcript:

"At this point i'd have to" - capitalize "i'd".

"Indeed, Suicide would be quite simple., you just need to throw one switch for me, and i'll do the rest."
- change ", Suicide" to either ", suicide" or ". Suicide";
- change "., you" to ". You" or ", you" or "; you";
- capitalize "i'll".

"Hey, ennesby, how'd it go?" - capitalize "ennesby".

http://schlockmercenary.com/d/20010505.html bonus strip

"As long as i've got you at gunpoint" - capitalize "i've"

"then yes, that's what i'm saying." - capitalize "i'm"

"i'm not a god" - capitalize "i'm"

For this type of issue, you might consider doing an archive-wide search and replace for "i'm", "i'll", "i've", "i", and the proper names of characters in lowercase, assuming you have the transcripts and strips in a form conducive to an archive-wide search and replace.

Okay, for now I'm just going to worry about the strips themselves. Transcript issues need to be fixed too, but not for print because the transcripts never appear in print.

http://schlockmercenary.com/d/20000702.html - The sound effect of Keyvn taking down Shodan differs between the strip and the transcript; the strip has it as "THROOOOOOOOWWHAMMO", while the transcript has it as "THROOOOOOOOWHAMMMO" (one more M and one less W").

http://schlockmercenary.com/d/20000703.html - in the last panel, it looks like no space exists between "fire" and the emphasized "at".

http://schlockmercenary.com/d/20000704.html - Schlock's last sentence in the strip appears to end with an exclamation mark, but the transcript just has a period. (Either that, or the period in the strip has some serious blurring.)

http://schlockmercenary.com/d/20000706.html - the transcript has "Sign: Engineering Bridge", but in the strip those words appear on two different signs.

http://schlockmercenary.com/d/20000707.html - transcript error: "It reduces the subject to standing gravitic waves, and then transports then, and itself [...]"; change the second "then" to "them". Correct in the strip.

Edit: OK, I won't post any more transcript issues in this topic, only issues in the strip.

Edit: Since most of my posts above this one consisted of transcript issues, let me point to the posts that mentioned issues in the strip so you can ignore the previous posts before this one:
viewtopic.php?p=308146#308146
viewtopic.php?p=308154#308154

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010304.html - In the last panel, when Schlock says "you don't have to, you know.", the first "you" should become "You".

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010308.html - In the second panel, the phrase "I'm the helpful, Emergency Medical Hologram" feels very awkward with the comma; I believe it would flow much more smoothly without that comma: "I'm the helpful Emergency Medical Hologram".

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010303.html - Schlock's "what the-?" should have a capital "What".

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010225.html - Schlock's "uh-oh" and "step away" need capitalization.

Switching gears to focus on the strips in the upcoming Book II.

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20030825.html - "We had to grow you a new body, afterwards." feels awkward with the comma; I think it would flow more smoothly without. (The comma would make sense with "Afterwards, ...", but doesn't with "..., afterwards.")

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010916.html - The link to http://www.schlockmercenary.com/letters/d/20010915.html in the footnote no longer works.

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20030829.html - Google strongly suggests writing "screenwriter" as one word rather than the hyphenated "screen-writer" used in the last panel. See the Googlefight for "screenwriter" versus "screen-writer", which gives 25.1 million hits for the non-hyphenated version versus 316,000 for the hyphenated version. The hits for the former also seem to include various different organizations of screenwriters, all of which use the non-hyphenated version.

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010304.html

In the final panel, the beginning of Schlock's sentence needs to be capitalised.


http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010303.html

Second panel, capitalisation in Schlock's sentence.

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010318.html

Fourth panel, Schlock's second sentence. "shame" should be capitalised.

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010225.html

2 in this one

First, seventh panel, Schlock's speech "time to hit" should be "Time to hit"

Secondly, final panel, Schlock, "step away from the tub of happiness" needs capitalisation too.

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010218.html

6th panel, "vaporising" needs capitalisation.

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010214.html

Final panel, Schlock's line needs capitalisation.

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20010125.html

Final panel, Ennesby's line "oh no" needs capitalisation.

Shoot. I wish this thread was here 3 years ago. I found quite a few back when I was typing them into the MSS database, but I've forgotten them all by now. (I entered them in the database exactly as they were in the original.)

I don't know if this is "similar" enough to a typo or grammatical error, but Doc Voyt seems to be missing eyebrows in panel 4 of http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20031221.html.

Another one: http://www.schlockmercenary.com/d/20040911.html seems to have an unerased pencil line in panel 1, on Holopetey's speech bubble.