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Author:  alpha [ Sat Dec 03, 2016 10:41 pm ]
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Black Sheep wrote:
FreeFlier wrote:
Black Sheep wrote:
With respect, I disagree.

* "Large enough" means "Your fines are large enough to make you feel some pain from your mis-deeds."
* "Small enough" refers to the fact that the steeper the penalty, the more the temptation to try to get out of it by rebelling. It's a cost-benefit decision: if the penalty is too steep, the benefits gained (the Esspies get some of the benefit of the sale of the "shovels") no longer outweigh the costs (Murtaugh's "cut"). With a less steep penalty, the costs of a rebellion (military expense and the risks of possible failure) outweigh the benefits (a relatively merciful settlement).

That depends on if you're talking about fines or profits.

If they're talking fines, then your reading is correct, but I read it as applying to profits, in which case it's backwards.

--FreeFlier

*nods* Whereas I read large and small in relation to Murtaugh's "cut"--basically, a fine or penalty taken from what they could have made from the sale of shovels.

On second thought, it is applying to fines. The Unnamed Espee refers to Murtagh's cut of the shovel sales.

Author:  keybounce [ Sun Dec 04, 2016 11:35 pm ]
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Tonight's comic is labeled both, in big letters, Book 17: A Little Immortality, *and* in text, Book 16: Big Dumb Objects, Part 4

We never did see Big Dumb Objects, Part 5.

Author:  stonefish [ Tue Dec 27, 2016 7:18 pm ]
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December 27th, 2016

"Did it really take four months to repair the flagship."
should be
"Did it really take four months to repair the flagship?"

Author:  stonefish [ Sun Jan 08, 2017 3:59 am ]
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http://www.schlockmercenary.com/2000-12-30

Massey's last name is spelled wrong (or perhaps right), in his very first appearance.

Does Howard even read these things anymore? :)

Author:  evileeyore [ Mon Mar 06, 2017 2:44 am ]
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stonefish wrote:
Does Howard even read these things anymore? :)

Unknown.

My contribution:

http://www.schlockmercenary.com/2017-03-06

Closed quote on 'Battlebots', but no open end to the quote.

Author:  Stanistani [ Fri Mar 31, 2017 1:41 am ]
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Today's comic: https://www.schlockmercenary.com/2017-03-31
'threating' should be 'threatening'

Author:  evileeyore [ Fri Mar 31, 2017 12:11 pm ]
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March 31, 2017
Our Narrator conflates Kath with Liz in the notes.

Author:  Fishman [ Thu Apr 06, 2017 10:48 am ]
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In 2017-04-05, the brown one is identified as Hazz. But previously in 2017-03-23, the green one is identified and responds as Hazz. Hazz continues to be brown on 2017-04-02, so 2-1 suggests Hazz is the brown. Hazz seems to consistently have two sets of whiskers in all cases.

Meanwhile, in 2017-03-24, the brown is now identified as Putzho, while in 2017-04-03, the green is identified as Putzho. Putzho always has one set of whiskers.

Author:  keybounce [ Sat Apr 08, 2017 12:32 am ]
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"Downlifted" should probably be "Downloaded" (http://www.schlockmercenary.com/2017-04-07)

Author:  Nemoricus [ Sun Apr 09, 2017 7:53 pm ]
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In 2017-4-9's strip, "I have list of things" in panel 2 should be "I have a list of things".

Author:  Black Sheep [ Wed Apr 26, 2017 8:06 pm ]
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4-27, third panel: Ebby's balloon. "Daggermother" should have quotes on both sides, or none.

Author:  Black Sheep [ Sun May 07, 2017 8:47 pm ]
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May 7, 2017, last panel: the Cynthetic Certainty doesn't have her "main gun" visible.

Author:  WickedWolfie [ Thu Jun 22, 2017 1:23 am ]
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http://www.schlockmercenary.com/2017-06-22

Third panel: It has an indexing agent!

(Unless it's meant to be some sort of cheezeburger reference, but it doesn't seem right for the character to make that reference).

Author:  evileeyore [ Thu Jun 22, 2017 1:10 pm ]
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WickedWolfie wrote:
http://www.schlockmercenary.com/2017-06-22

Third panel: It has an indexing agent!

(Unless it's meant to be some sort of cheezeburger reference, but it doesn't seem right for the character to make that reference).

Actually it would be "I have..." since Putzho is referring to his own mind. So, yeah, this was totes cheezeburgered.

Author:  Klimpaloon [ Sun Sep 17, 2017 9:01 pm ]
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http://www.schlockmercenary.com/2017-09-18

Comic says "Book 17" instead of "Book 18." Also, the comic is still sorted under the Book 17 epilogue.

Author:  Sean [ Sun Feb 11, 2018 4:55 pm ]
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Minor nitpick.
Food "calories" are actually kilocalories.
A one-"calorie" beverage has 1,000 calories in it.
And a 500 calorie hamburger would probably be cardboard, whereas a 500 "calorie" or 500 kilocalorie hamburger sounds pretty good right now.
So, off by a factor of 3.

Author:  Bruce the Loon [ Sat Mar 31, 2018 6:43 am ]
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Today's strip - https://www.schlockmercenary.com/2018-03-31

2nd panel, "Mess? Kombou, just send prisoner to Fangstorm." should be "Mess? Kombou, just send the prisoner to Fangstorm."

Author:  Nemoricus [ Sat Oct 27, 2018 11:29 pm ]
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The first panel refers to the "Maxim 41 resurrectees". Shouldn't that be Maxim 39?

Author:  zaj_ [ Mon Nov 05, 2018 1:44 am ]
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Today's strip https://www.schlockmercenary.com/2018-11-05, fourth panel, the commodore speaking:

I'm not a native english speaker, but shouldn't it be "... we haven't given..." instead of "...give..."?

[edit: strip has been corrected in the meantime]

Author:  zaj_ [ Wed Nov 07, 2018 1:49 am ]
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Possibly found another one in https://www.schlockmercenary.com/2004-07-22

Panel three: "Rule Number One!", shouldn't it be "Maxim Number One!" nowadays?

Author:  WickedWolfie [ Wed Nov 14, 2018 5:35 am ]
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https://www.schlockmercenary.com/2018-11-14

Says "Executive officers are bastions of great whatever-the-captain-needs bastions of."

I know what you were going for here, but rather than "whatever-the-captain-needs-bastions-of" it reads like you changed sentence structure midway through and duplicated some words.

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